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发表于 5-8-2004 02:22:29|来自:上海嘉定区
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<DIV class=quote><B>以下是引用<I>danhe</I>在2004-8-4 15:21:30的发言:</B><B><FONT size=6>
<P align=center>STUDY PLAN</P></B></FONT><FONT size=2></FONT>
<P>Dear Sir/ Mdm:</P>
<P>First of all, I would like to express my deepest appreciation to you for spending time on reading my plan.</P>
<P>My name is xxx, a citizen of <FONT color=#ff0000><B>People <FONT color=#0000ff>(People's)</FONT></B> </FONT><FONT color=#000000>Republic of China</FONT>, I am 19 years old this year, I was born in 15<SUP>th</SUP> June, 1985. And I am currently taking diploma course at Shanghai Jianqiao <B><FONT color=#0000ff>C</FONT></B>olleauge.</P>
<P>Ever since the reformation of <B><FONT color=#0000ff>the</FONT></B> new economic system <FONT color=#ff0000><B>has been</B></FONT> <B><FONT color=#0000ff>(which)</FONT></B> started few decades ago, china has been developing in a rapid pace, and the speed of this process will eventually <B><FONT color=#0000ff>be</FONT></B> even faster <B><FONT color=#ff0000>then</FONT></B> <FONT color=#0909f7><B>(than)</B></FONT> before after China joined the WTO. <B><FONT color=#0000ff><FONT color=#ff00cc><- 中国已经加入WTO,这句话应该用</FONT>"and this process is even faster after China joined the WTO.</FONT></B>Therefore, more contemporary skills and knowledge are required for the new generation in China. In order to catch up <B><FONT color=#0000ff>with</FONT></B> the fast pace of economic development, today, many parents <B><FONT color=#ff0000>from</FONT></B> <FONT color=#3300ff><B>(in)</B></FONT> China <B><FONT color=#ff0000>have choose to send their children to study overseas.</FONT></B> <B><FONT color=#0000ff>(send their children to study overseas.) </FONT></B>By doing this, <B><FONT color=#0000ff>the</FONT></B> new generation in China will <FONT color=#ff0000><B>not only</B></FONT> <B><FONT color=#0000ff>(be)</FONT></B> able to find <B><FONT color=#ff0000>out</FONT></B> more opportunities <B><FONT color=#ff0000>that</FONT></B> available to them, <B><FONT color=#ff0000>but also will</FONT></B> <B><FONT color=#0000ff>(at the same time)</FONT></B> have better understanding <B><FONT color=#ff0000>of </FONT><FONT color=#0000ff>(on)</FONT></B> other <B><FONT color=#ff0000>counties’</FONT><FONT color=#0000ff>(countries')</FONT></B> culture.</P>
<P>After several discussion<B><FONT color=#0000ff>s</FONT></B> with my parents, I <FONT color=#ff0000><B>have made the decision that <FONT color=#0000ff>(decided)</FONT></B></FONT> to pursue my further study in Singapore, as far as we concern, Singapore is not only a <FONT color=#ff0000><B>multi-nation <FONT color=#0000ff>(multi-religion)</FONT></B></FONT> and multi-culture country, but it has also a wonderful study environment. And if I am able to study under such great circumstance, my parents will eventually feel at ease and will not have to worry about me, <FONT color=#ff0000><B>especially to a girl. <FONT color=#0000ff>(</FONT><FONT color=#0000ff>建议加一个句子,没想好怎么改)</FONT></B></FONT> </P>
<P>I have submitted my application to study Hotel management course at AIT Academic. After certain research that I have done, I found out that this school has a experienced <FONT color=#ff0000><B>lecturers</B> </FONT><FONT color=#0000ff><B>(teaching)</B></FONT> team, and contemporary teaching facilities. <B><FONT color=#ff0000>In the</FONT></B> meanwhile, they are prestigious in Singapore as well, and I believe it is a great place for me to study. In order to complete my course, I will have to study the fundamental knowledge in campus for 8 months, and subsequently, I <B><FONT color=#0000ff>will</FONT></B> have to undergo 6 months’ attachment, and only <B><FONT color=#ff0000>then </FONT><FONT color=#0000ff>(after that)</FONT></B>, I will be considered as complete<B><FONT color=#0000ff>d</FONT></B> my whole course and graduate<B><FONT color=#0909f7>d</FONT></B> from AIT Academic.</P>
<P>During my 14 months <B><FONT color=#0000ff>(</FONT><FONT color=#0000ff>of study)</FONT></B> <B><FONT color=#ff0000>studies</FONT></B>, I will try my very best to explore my potential capability, broaden my view and enrich my overall professional knowledge to confront the future challenges.</P>
<P>Both my parents have a stable income and we also have enough saving to sustain my study in Singapore. And I believe this stable financial situation will <B><FONT color=#ff0000>help </FONT><FONT color=#0033ff>(allow)</FONT></B> me to concentrate on my study.</P>
<P>I hereby truly seek for your approval on my study application, and I <B><FONT color=#ff0000>am</FONT></B> <B><FONT color=#3300ff>(will)</FONT></B> sincerely <B><FONT color=#ff0000>looking forward to</FONT></B> treasure this overseas<B><FONT color=#ff0000>’ </FONT></B>study <B><FONT color=#ff0000>opportunities </FONT><FONT color=#0000ff>(opportunity)</FONT></B>, I will strictly follow the rules and regulation<B><FONT color=#0000ff>s</FONT></B> in Singapore and dedicate to my study. Upon finishing my study, I will apply all my professional knowledge to my career and devote myself to my hometown and my dearest country.</P>
<P>Best Regards</P>
<P>xxxxx </P></DIV>
<P><B><FONT color=#ff0000>红色</FONT></B> - 我认为不恰当或者有错误,应该删除
<B><FONT color=#0000ff>蓝色</FONT></B> - 我的意见
<P>改到我快疯了。。。
<P>感谢这位同学的乐于助人,同时希望你检查过后再发上来。而且,有时候不要原文照翻,会变得很罗嗦。如果对语法不太肯定,少用长句子!读的人都会犯迷糊。
<P>我的英文也不是很好,只是发现一些错误。有些则是觉得语句蹩脚,稍作改动。如有冒犯,请原谅。</P>[em07]
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